#121
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almost every positive comment on my tumblr is for something i posted and attributed only in the tags lol
#122
penitent
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Impper posted:
hahaha i could never write a poetry that good. that's mayakovsky ofc.



o. well its a cool poem + i liked it

#123
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yea. i suppose i did rearrange and cut it up. most of the rest of the poem isn't that good.. u can look it up and judge it for urself thou
#124
penitent
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ive written like two (2) poems in my adult life
#125
penitent
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when i was in secondary school like 14 years old we had to write poems for english & they were published with a bunch of poems from other london schools to be sold back at exorbitant prices to smug parents.... anyway i found a copy a while back and mine is like the only poem in the whole fuckin thing to have like a reasonable attempt at meter and non-forced rhymes and marxism as a dominant theme lol
#126
penitent
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Impper posted:
yea. i suppose i did rearrange and cut it up. most of the rest of the poem isn't that good.. u can look it up and judge it for urself thou



Proletarians
arrive at communism
from below -
by the low way of mines,
sickles,
and pitchforks -
But I,
from poetry’s skies,
plunge into communism,
because
without it
I feel no love.

im not sure if i really like or really dislike this bit but its one of the two

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deadken posted:

Impper posted:
yea. i suppose i did rearrange and cut it up. most of the rest of the poem isn't that good.. u can look it up and judge it for urself thou

Proletarians
arrive at communism
from below -
by the low way of mines,
sickles,
and pitchforks -
But I,
from poetry’s skies,
plunge into communism,
because
without it
I feel no love.

im not sure if i really like or really dislike this bit but its one of the two

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deadken posted:
when i was in secondary school like 14 years old we had to write poems for english & they were published with a bunch of poems from other london schools to be sold back at exorbitant prices to smug parents.... anyway i found a copy a while back and mine is like the only poem in the whole fuckin thing to have like a reasonable attempt at meter and non-forced rhymes and marxism as a dominant theme lol

hahaha, though i've written seriously hundreds or even thousands of poems, i am still allergic to meter, and any attempts to do so just drive something in my head completely bonkers. that's why i write fraud poetry (prose poetry), which i've got something of a better sense for anyway

also i did love that line but yea, i thought it was maybe too... something... to include... on a shitty tumblr that nobody ever reads...

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penitent
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i tried to write nonmetrical poetry once and it just felt, iono...... wrong.... i enjoy reading it but when writing poetry i get really hung up on rhythm and syllables..... it doesnt always work though lol, in that one i posted there were a whole bunch of awkwardly jutting lines
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haha, i remember in that poem really liking the one type of line and really hating the other. but i dont remember what they were or why.

when i'm writing in verse i can basically only focus on the length of the lines and whether it looks 'right,' i mean other than just saying things
#131
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babyfinland posted:



lmao this is totally hte same guy

#132
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jools posted:


milk bash

a bash of milk

milk bashing

#133
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i wrote a poem the other day it really sucks just like my life and my posting on this shitty website fuck you all
#134
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the language is too forceful it is too abstract and way too angsty
#135
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i'm white. i'm a white person. and in my twenties.
#136
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ive had every opportunity in life and i still have no foreseeable future
#137
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does anyone want to open an opium den with me and just fuckin burn out
#138
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everything is ephemeral and slowly sliding away from you
#139
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we're all easily manipulated animals and the smallest stupidest things make us flip out i hope our failed evolutionary experiment ends soon
#140
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please downvote all these shitty posts
#141
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none of us will ever write anything even closely resembling the shittiest frank o'hara poem
#142
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we would all make terrible communists and even more terrible capitalists no society would want the absurd dregs of humanity represented here
#143
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i'm doing pretty good at capitalism tyvm
#144
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i won't open an opium den with you but i can give u enough morphine to murder yourself ill watch u take it
#145
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regret rips ruthlessly at my seared remains
#146
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confessionalism is bourgeois and reactionary but who the fuck cares
#147
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i'm a sick Eagle looking at the sky
#148
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i cannot say, or guess, for i know only a heap of broken images
#149
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i will never know intimacy i can only futilely bloody my hands on the wall that separates us from each other
#150
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jesus aerdil just go to the library and ask a girl reading 100 years of solitude out for a milkshake or something
#151
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lol
#152
tardy on these heaters
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blinkandwheeze posted:
jesus aerdil just go to the library and ask a girl reading 100 years of solitude out for a milkshake or something

Proletarians
arrive at communism
from below -
by the low way of mines,
sickles,
and pitchforks -
But I,
from poetry’s skies,
plunge into communism,
because
without it
I feel no love.

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aerdil posted:
does anyone want to open an opium den with me and just fuckin burn out


sorry little driving dog, i only waste my life away ironically

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aerdil posted:
i wrote a poem the other day it really sucks just like my life and my posting on this shitty website fuck you all




ahaha

#156
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lmbo, what happened aerdil why are you pulling a wddp?
#157
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aerdil posted:
i'm a sick Eagle looking at the sky


on your back, waiting to die

#158
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aerdil, have you tried exercise and sunlight? or maybe gardening?
#159
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gardening. . .gardening f.t.w.
#160
Kurdt
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why do people like gardening idgi